[Anglais] Présentation orale

Bonjour !
J'ai une présentation orale à faire, et si vous avez le temps, vous pourriez vérifier s'il n'y a pas de tournures de phrase boiteuses ou de fautes graves en anglais s'il vous plaît ?
Merci beaucoup.

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There are several recurrent themes in the short story Finishing School by Maya Angelou, and the novel Lies of Silence by Brian Moore, such as the violence on individuals, to be caught in a political cause (which is the main theme for Lies of Silence), but also to fight for a political cause and to suffer from social prejudices (which is the main theme for the other short story).

Let’s start with the violence on individuals. In Lies of Silence, the IRA causes physical violence with bomb attacks to help the Catholics’ situation in North Ireland. Their attempt of killing Reverend Pottinger is a good example of it. The novel also deals with psychological violence, when Michael and Moira Dillon are took hostage by the IRA or when these ones threaten to kill Moira if Michael doesn’t obey instructions. In Finishing School, the violence is more verbal and psychological. Margaret, the main character, is called nigger, which is insulting for a black person. Also, the social attitudes and manners of the times force her to be distinguished from the white people and remember her every day that she’s considered inferior.

Both main characters of the two stories are caught in a social conflict: black people against white people in Finishing School and Catholics against Protestants in Lies of Silence. In Lies of Silence, Michael isn’t really fighting for a cause. The fighters are the IRA, who wants to free the Catholics, and they use violence because they think it’ll help and because they view themselves as an army. The characters related to Michael are mostly against this organisation, because they feel caught by the violence that is just killing people and is not helping the cause. On the other side, Finishing School depicts Margaret’s struggle against racism. Even if both stories are about situations of conflict for civil rights, instead of religious conflict, it’s more a racial issue. She rebels against black discrimination by breaking Mrs. Cullinan’s favorite china, for example, because she refuses to be considered as nobody. To go back to Lies of Silence, Michael is more fighting against the IRA, because he refuses to let them kill innocents.

Social prejudices are the main theme of Finishing School, but they are also important in Lies of Silence. In the novel, the Catholics are discriminated: they often live in poverty; they are often lumped together with IRA’s actions because they are of the same religion, even if they don’t approve the attacks. For example, a member of Pottinger’s group generalizes when he says thant the IRA might have told their plans to Michael because they’re both Catholics. Religion is one of the motives to perpetuate prejudices and sometimes physical violence. On the other hand, in Finishing School, the social prejudices and discrimination are based on the skin color, not religion. Margaret’s world is made of poverty and racism against black people, who have fewer rights than white people. The world of black people is clearly different from the whites’ one, discrimination makes it difficult for black girls to have any other ambition than to work for white women. We see better the difference between the two situations in Finishing School, where Margaret works at Mrs. Cullinan’s house, than in Lies of Silence, because Michael doesn’t seem to ha a very definite view on the political crisis. He doesn’t like Pottinger’s group, but he doesn’t either approve the IRA.

Finally, the last important common theme is the harsh realities of the world, which are learn the hard way in both stories. In Lies of Silence, Michael is held hostage by a group of terrorists he doesn’t support. Guns are pointed all night at him and his wife, their lives are put in danger, and he’s forced to bring a bomb at his own hotel with his car. Also, he suffers from the dilemma of saving his wife of many innocent lives, and from the difficulties of not loving his wife anymore. His adultery also precipitates the breakdown of his marriage. In Finishing School, Margaret learns the hard the realities of her life with social prejudices and psychological violence against black people. She also learns about the difficulties of growing up in a poor and discriminatory environment, and about the importance of her identity in a world that will always try to deny it.

In conclusion, some themes are recurrent in both stories, but with slight differences due to the times, the localisations and the different conflicts.

Bonsoir,

There are several recurrent themes in the short story Finishing School by Maya Angelou and the novel Lies of Silence by Brian Moore, such as the violence on individuals, being caught in a political cause (which is the main theme for Lies of Silence), but also fighting for a political cause and suffering from social prejudices (which is the main theme for the other short story). 1°Tu gagnerais en clarté d’expression en faisant plusieurs phrases, chacune se rapportant à l’une ou l’autre des œuvres mentionnées.
2° Seul le gérondif peut prendre toutes les fonctions du nom.

Let’s start with the violence on individuals. In Lies of Silence, the IRA cause physical violence with bomb attacks to help the Catholics’ situation in Northern Ireland.C'est un groupe d'hommes = verbe pluriel Their attempt at killing Reverend Pottinger is a good example of it. The novel also deals with psychological violence, when Michael and Moira Dillon are took taken hostages by the IRA or when these ones the latter threaten to kill Moira if Michael doesn’t obey instructions. In Finishing School, the violence is more verbal and psychological. Margaret, the main character, is called nigger, which is insulting for to a black person. Also, the social attitudes and manners of the times force her to be distinguished from the white people and remember remind her every day that she’s considered inferior. remember sth = se rappeler de qqch <---> remind sb sth = rappeler qqch à qqn

Both main characters of the two stories are caught in a social conflict: black people against white people in Finishing School and Catholics against Protestants in Lies of Silence. In Lies of Silence, Michael isn’t really fighting for a cause. The fighters are the IRA who want to free the Catholics, and they use violence because they think it’ll help and because they view themselves as an army. The characters related to Michael are mostly against this organisation because they feel caught by the violence that is just killing people and is not helping the cause. On the other side, Finishing School depicts Margaret’s struggle against racism. Even if both stories are about situations of conflict for civil rights, instead of religious conflict, it’s more a racial issue. She rebels against black discrimination by breaking Mrs. Cullinan’s favorite china for example because she refuses to be considered as nobody. To go back to Lies of Silence, Michael is fighting more against the IRA because he refuses to let them kill innocents.
Pas de virgule devant un pronom relatif (which/who) ou une conjonction de coordination (because).

Social prejudices are the main theme of Finishing School, but they are also important in Lies of Silence. In the novel, the Catholics are discriminated: they often live in poverty; they are often lumped together with IRA’s actions because they are of belong to the same religion even if they don’t approve the attacks. For example, a member of Pottinger’s group generalizes when he says that the IRA might have told their plans to Michael because they’re both Catholics. Religion is one of the motives to perpetuate prejudices and sometimes physical violence. On the other hand, in Finishing School, the social prejudices and discrimination are based on the skin color, not religion. Margaret’s world is made of poverty and racism against black people who have fewer rights than white people. The world of black people is clearly different from the whites’ one. Nouvelle phrase> Discrimination makes it difficult for black girls to have any other ambition than to work for white women. We better see the difference between the two situations in Finishing School where Margaret works at Mrs. Cullinan’s house than in Lies of Silence because Michael doesn’t seem to have a very definite view on the political crisis. He doesn’t like Pottinger’s group, but he doesn’t approve the IRA either.

Finally, the last important common theme is the harsh realities of the world which are learnt the hard way in both stories. In Lies of Silence, Michael is held hostage by a group of terrorists he doesn’t support. Guns are pointed all night at him and his wife, their lives are put in danger and he’s forced to bring a bomb at to his own hotel with in his car. He also suffers from the dilemma of saving his wife, many innocent lives, and from the difficulties of not loving his wife anymore. His adultery also precipitates the breakdown of his marriage. In Finishing School, Margaret learns the hard realities of her life with social prejudices and psychological violence against black people. She also learns about the difficulties of growing up in a poor and discriminatory environment and about the importance of her identity in a world that will always try to deny it.

In conclusion, some themes are recurrent in both stories, but with slight differences due to the times, the localisations and the different conflicts.

Bonjour,
Merci beaucoup pour votre réponse ! Je viens de retravailler mon introduction, qu'en pensez-vous ?

There are several recurrent themes in the short story Finishing School by Maya Angelou and the novel Lies of Silence by Brian Moore. The main idea for the short story is suffering from social prejudices. Being caught in a political cause is the main theme of the novel. Both stories also deal with subjects as violence on individuals, and fighting for a political cause.

Sinon, pour mon second paragraphe, vous avez mis "the latter" à la place de these ones (ceux-ci, en français). Y a-t-il des formulations différentes pour celui-ci, celle-ci et celles-ci ?
Merci beaucoup !



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There are several recurrent themes in the short story Finishing School by Maya Angelou and the novel Lies of Silence by Brian Moore. The main idea for the short story is suffering from social prejudices. Being caught in a political cause is the main theme of the novel. Both stories also deal with subjects as violence on individuals, and fighting for a political cause.
Sans conteste, ça coule beaucoup mieux ainsi.

Sinon, pour mon second paragraphe, vous avez mis "the latter" à la place de these ones (ceux-ci, en français). Y a-t-il des formulations différentes pour celui-ci, celle-ci et celles-ci ?
Rappel : celui-ci/celle-ci/ceux-ci/ces derniers/ces dernières c-à-d- les derniers nommés = the latter.
celui-là/celle-là/ceux-là/celles-là...........................c-à-d- les premiers nommés = the former