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The typical computer enthusiast of popular imagination - pale, geeky, male - has failed to live up to his reputation.
Research shows that among the youngest Internet users, the primary creators of web content (blog, raphics, photographs, Web sites) are not misfit boys. On the contrary, the cyberpioneers of the moment are digitally effusive teenage girls.
"Most guys don't have patience for this kind of thing", said Nicole Dominguez, 13, of Mirama, Florida, whose hobbies include designing free icons, layouts end "glitters" (shimmering animations) for the Web and MySpace pages of other teenagers. "It's really hard."
Nicole posts her graphics, as well as her own HTLM and CSS computer coding advice (she is self-taught), on the pink and violet Sodevious.net, a domain her mother bought for her in October.
" If you did a poll I think you'd find that boys rarely have sites", she said. " It's mostly girls."
Indeed, a study published in December by the Pew Internet & American Life Project found that among Web users ages 12 to 17, significantly more girls than boys blog (35 percent of girls compared with 20 percent of boys) and create or work on their own Web page (32 percent of girls compared with 22 percent of boys).
Girls also eclipse boys when it comes to building or working on Web site for other people and creating profiles on social networking sites (70 percent of girls 15 to 17 have one, versus 57 percent of boys 15 to 17). Video posting was the sole area in which boys outdid girls: boys are almost twice as likely as girls to post video files.
The girls include bloggers who pontificate on timeless tenage matters such as "evil teachers" and dealing with parents, as well as entrepreneurs whose online pursuits generate more money than a summer's worth of baby-sitting.



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It is a press article of New York Times dating from the first in March 2008
It deals with the behaviour the girls and boys a computer
The first big idea is thos are teenage gils who creating sites
The second big idea is ... ???????


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